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Sunlight.
Shine on me.
Warm my skin
Release me from my February woes
Rest on my closed eyelids, my no longer frosted lashes
Lull me into a soft summer sleep
Don't wake me from this dream.

Wind.
Carress me.
Touch my hair
Refresh my lungs from the poisons of winter.
Gently stir me from my light repose
Sing through the trees, the timbre of your voice soothes me
Propel my lovely cloud of disconnect.
©2008-2009 =daowns
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It was nice outside.

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It sounds nice...I'm not really the poetry authority but I'll try.

Warm my skin
Release me from my February woes
Rest on my closed eyelids,


Maybe a comma after skin and woes
The same for

Carress me.
Touch my hair
Refresh my lungs from the poisons of winter.


After hair.

I think Carress is spelled wrong caress is the correct spelling.

Gently stir me from my light repose
Sing through the trees,


Maybe a semicolon or period after repose. Maybe after the last me too.

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I don't really. I would guess the punctuation depends. Tell me if you need anything else.

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